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TOPIC: ♥~Moonstar's Poetry/Prosetry/Prose~♥ [blowing on eyelashes uppp 12/18]


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RE: *~Moonstar's Poetry~* -New poems 11/25-


Neeh, haha, I understand for both poems, especially the first one. How else are you gonna make it rhyme? cx

My favorite one out of the two is "Comparisons".
I just noticed that I'm more attracted to poems with shorter lines then longer ones. cx

I absolutely love how you don't have to use fancy schmancy words just to make the poems look nice. c:

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We all have our moments:
A moment to cry, a moment to laugh.
A moment to be held, a moment to be let go.
A moment to be sad for not having what we want,
and a moment to be happy with what we got.

Yeah, we all have those moments.
And I advise you not to put them to waste.
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I understand where you're coming from; thank you. :D
People just prefer different things, I guess, I rather like the longer one because of the fancy-schmancy word useage. x33 But I love hearing your opinions.
Thanks!!!

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New poems! PLEASEPLEASE tell me your favorite stanzes, phrases, lines, etc!

The first one I wrote a couple weeks ago. This is how I used to feel, but the second poem is how I feel now. I wrote the second one a few days ago to express my happiness. :D

Simplicity
It couldnt have been simpler, a stupid girl and a stubborn guy
The one with the denim skirt made a decision
The one wearing the ineffective belt missing golden opportunities

And the question gnawing at my heart is hollowing
Do you ever miss the future?
Forcing myself to build up confidence Im not ready to face

And just when Im feeling comfortable
Courageous and weightless above the world
My strings of trust snap like brittle candy

Falling is difficult as you flicker through my mind
The tears from my confused eyes descend as freely as my body
The position is hard to tackle

I wish I could land softly in your supportive arms
The simple touch awakening our spirits
And with connected eyes, the reality is visible

But as I glare at the murky sky
Aching against the bone-breaking ground
Realization of your worthless absence has never been crueler

As your beautiful image begins to fade away
The thought is merely heartbreaking
It couldnt have been simpler, a stupid girl and a stubborn guy
The uncertainty leaking from your lies
Simplicity
Thats all it came down to



Another Step Forward
Devoured without chewing
By the foggy memories

Reminiscing the incidents,
Pressing replay continually

Wishing the taste would last forever
My heart burns with admiration

The genuine, lovable grin
Never escaping my mind

Your eyes would never fib
Directly to my face

I hope youre just as cursed as I am
A spell cast that prohibits any thoughts irrelevant of me

Decoding your actions while juggling my emotions
Has never been easier

Today we are friends
Tomorrow something greater


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oh snowy.... it makes me cry. ur such a great poem writer :'(

good job mooners i mean snow. =D lubbs it

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you're hiding in the closet
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Goodness, thank you so much1!! Seriously, means a bunch. ^^

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=D write moor!!!!!!! XD

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darlin',
you're hiding in the closet
once again, start smiling.
I know you're tryin', real hard
not to turn your head away
pretty darling, face tomorrow
tomorrow's not yesterday. <3

 



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I probably will soon!

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yayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayayay! i'm so sorry. i get carried away a little bit.................XDXDXDXD =D

can't wait snow! =D

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darlin',
you're hiding in the closet
once again, start smiling.
I know you're tryin', real hard
not to turn your head away
pretty darling, face tomorrow
tomorrow's not yesterday. <3

 



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Freeze
The dusty video tapes roll robotically on the little T.V.
The picture so surreal
The scene dramatically unusual
The days you would lean in for a photo on Christmas
Generously giving each other gifts
Chortling together
The times you politely answered my questions
With a sweet voice
When I would innocently ask
I suppose we never truly got along
But the old days flowed so much more smoothly
I know you hate me now
But I genuinely love you
And with my back pressed against the wooden bed
Staring blankly at the flashing videos
It couldnt have been real
The tears stream
As swiftly as an indigo waterfall
Down my rosy cheeks
Chilly from the melting snow outside
I cry
And I think
Back then
Did I ever know?
Did I ever make an attempt at freezing the perfect moment
And thinking
"Right here, right now."


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About my older brother who hates me to death.


-- Edited by Snow at 07:53, 2008-12-28

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RE: ♥~Moonstar's Poetry~♥ -New poems 12/28/08-


Anyone else like them? :DD

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