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TOPIC: Forever Moon *chapter three up*


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Forever Moon *chapter one up*


Lillers: Really? Haha i've written a few stories here before. i used to write stories ALOOOTT.. x3 And thanksss!
Ebbers: Good! In fact, i've been done with chapter one for a while, so i guess i'l post that now if you're so impatient xDD

Chapter One

Moonpaw galloped forward, her awkward paws fumbling unsteadily over the strange surface. Sand, Autumnleaf called it. Still, Moonpaw was determined not to allow an unfamiliar ground shake her first day of fight training. How wonderful it was to actually be an apprentice, learning how to hunt and fight, preparing to be a noble warrior! Her ice blue eyes lit up with excitement.

Suddenly, gentle paws crashed into her side and she was thrown to the ground, a panting body over hers.

"Concentrate, Moonpaw." Autumnleaf, her mentor, instructed.

Moonpaw nodded briskly. Mouse-brain! She spat to herself. So far her first day was not going exceedingly well.

"Now, lets try it again, but this time, remember to pay attention." Autumnleafs voice was stern.

"I will!" Moonpaw assured her.

"Okay," Autumnleaf mewed. "Go."

Moonpaw darted forward towards Autumnleaf, her silver fur flying behind her. She pounced, but Autumnleaf was too quick for her. Her mentor dashed around her and struck her on the nose with sheathed claws. Moonpaw yelped in alarm, scrambling for her footing.

"That was better," Autumnleaf praised. "We'll work on timing tomorrow. For now, lets get back to camp. The sun is beginning to set."

"Okay," Moonpaw replied glumly. She had really enjoyed fight training.

When Moonpaw got back to camp, she retrieved a fat vole from the fresh kill pile and padded over to one of her closest friends, Littlepaw. She sat down and tore a fresh chunk off of her vole, dropping it at Littlepaw's feet. "Want some?" she offered.

"Sure!" Littlepaw dove at the vole, quickly devouring her portion. She licked her lips carefully. "I am so hungry. Shyheart and I were out hunting all day, and I didn't even catch a measly mouse tail!"

Moonpaw gulped down another piece of fresh kill. "Autumnleaf was teaching me how to fight and I kept messing up the positions." She hung her head at her clumsiness.

"Well, tomorrow will probably be better! We'll have more experience. After all, we were named apprentices three days ago." She fluffed up her fur proudly. "We've got to be catching on by now."
                Moonpaw knew she must be right. She usually was. Finishing her meal with a swift gulp, she galloped over to her den, exhausted and prepared to enjoy a deep, satisfying sleep, when she was interrupted by the call of her friend's mentor.

"Moonpaw!"

Moonpaw hesitated, then regretfully skidded to a halt, groaning. She padded over to Shyheart obediently.

"Yes?" she moaned.

Moonpaw could see the hurt seep through Shyhearts eyes from her reluctance. Shyheart was one of the most sensitive cats she knew. Still, the ebony she-cat only managed a pitiful stare and opened her mouth to speak. Moonpaw wasnt surprised; Shyheart rarely scolded anyone for their behavior.

"Please change the bedding in the elders den. Its getting rather damp."

Moonpaw groaned again. She was afraid of that.

"Of course," she muttered, and bounded away. Changing elders bedding! She spat. What other childish tasks will I have to perform in order to claim my place as a warrior of RiverClan?

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i know, not much action, but it'll get there! :D



-- Edited by Moonstar on Sunday 30th of August 2009 09:01:43 PM

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RE: Forever Moon *prologue up*


Hurray! Impatience wins the day! >=D Mwahaha! I love this chapter buddy! Its great! XD Icy blue eyes rock!! Hurray!

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RE: Forever Moon *chapter one up*


Hahahaha, thank you! Icy blue does win! I had to go and edit back quotations, which is lame because i thought activeboard fixed that problem long ago, but i guess not D:

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Dang Moons! This was amazing! I could feel every little detail in the cat's words and stuff. Good job!

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darlin',
you're hiding in the closet
once again, start smiling.
I know you're tryin', real hard
not to turn your head away
pretty darling, face tomorrow
tomorrow's not yesterday. <3

 



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I found that if you acctually put the quotains in before you post it up it doesnt get rid of them. So if you type it in microsoft word it would look like this when you are done with it here:


Ebonycloud''s heart pounded as she raced through the under growth panting heavily. Yet that persistant voice boomed, ""You can''t escape me little warrior.""
""Yeah but i can sure as heck try,"" she snarled back and pumped her legs faster.


So you have to put in an extra quotain or apostrophy(sp?) before you post it up =D It will automatically get rid of the ones that you had before and replace it with the ones you just typed so it will look like this when you acctually press the post button:

Ebonycloud's heart pounded as she raced through the under growth panting heavily. Yet that persistant voice boomed, "You can't escape me little warrior."
"Yeah but i can sure as heck try," she snarled back and pumped her legs faster.


-- Edited by Ebonycloud on Sunday 30th of August 2009 05:13:03 PM

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Thank you so much Timbas!! :D I'm so excited that you enjoy it :33
And Ebbs, thanks! I'll do that next time.. x3

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*le gasp*
IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT.
I have realized with what i have prepared for Moonpaw, Littlepaw definitely can NOT be her sister, so she is going to be Moonpaw's best friend. I will edit chapter one now. If anyone wants chapter two soon, just say so, and i'll work faster on it xDD

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*Oh, and Timber, i forgot to reply to you earlier when you posted about the prologue!! D: I'm sorry, i didn't see your post! But thank you so much!
Anyways, Chapter Two is almost complete, and i will edit this post with it when it is because i've been posting alot... The title will tell you when i post that ;]

BY THE WAY, i had to make slight modifications to the dialogue in the prologue and the characters list... just for a heads up ;]

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Haha, you are welcome Moons!
And I can't wait to see chapter 2. it'l be amazing, of course. moonpaw is so cool! *thumbs up* :3

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darlin',
you're hiding in the closet
once again, start smiling.
I know you're tryin', real hard
not to turn your head away
pretty darling, face tomorrow
tomorrow's not yesterday. <3

 



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Hahaha, thank you so much Timbas!! :pp Well, here is chapter two!!


Chapter Two

Moonpaws pale blue eyes slowly wedged open, the blinding light upsetting her deep sleep. She mewled, aroused by the different environment. Why is the light so startling to me? Ive seen enough sunlight in my life to not be so disturbed by it! Her pelt felt hot with embarrassment, wondering what her Clanmates were thinking. She slowly attempted to lift her head to look, when she realized it hurt her stiff neck. She tried again, mewling like a kit in the process.

"Her fur is silver like the moon," a heavenly voice purred proudly. "She is Moonkit." Moonpaw tilted her head in confusion and annoyance. I'm an apprentice, mouse-brain! She snarled. Suddenly, gentle teeth bit into her scruff and she was lifted into the air, swaying by the she-cats mouth. Moonpaw opened her mouth in a pouting wail, wiggling her tiny body back and forth. Her little claws flexed angrily, warning this strange cat not to go further. Finally, after what seemed like moons, her paws touched the soft surface once again. Heres my chance! She thought; she collected all of her energy and leapt away. But when she landed, her paws scrabbled unsteadily on the moist ground, as if shed never learned how to walk. Mouse dung! She spat. Move, you stupid paws!

The she-cat bent down to chuckle softly in Moonpaws ear. "Careful now, little one." It murmured. "No need to get hurt."

Moonpaw's lips curled into a snarl, and she caught a breath of the strange cats sharp scent. Milk, she realized with a start. But that could only mean...

The voice managed another giggle, her sweet, icy breath dangling over Moonpaws nose. "My lovely daughter, do hold still!"

Moonpaw awoke with a gasp, flailing her paws about the den. Her heartbeats throbbed inside her chest; her claws were unsheathed. Badgerpaw padded over with an annoyed expression of his face.

"Would you keep it down? Some of us actually sleep at night!" The feisty tom spat.

"Sorry," Moonpaw muttered, still dazed by her dream. This was the reoccurring nightmare that shed had for the past couple of months about her birth mother. Oh, how she wished she was still alive! How nice it would be to have a mother to cuddle with and to brag about her newly learned skills to. Managing a muffled sigh, she slowly drifted into the clearing, her eyes glazed over.

"Moonpaw!" Redleaf called out. The silver apprentice bounded over to the honorable Clan deputy, the traces of her nightmare vanishing. 
                "Yes?" she queried excitedly.

"Youre on border patrol. Were leaving right now."

Moonpaw nodded, wondering who else had been chosen. Her pelt prickled with delight. Her first border patrol! Her pale blue eyes sparkling, she hurried over to the bramble entrance. Glancing around, Moonpaw noted that, besides Redleaf and herself, Whitebird, Maplenose, and Thrushpaw were joining them. Redleaf carefully checked that every cat was there, and then flicked his tail as a signal to set out.

Moonpaw fell comfortably in step beside one of her apprentice friends, Thrushpaw, her whiskers tingling with enthusiasm. "Isnt this amazing, Thrushpaw?" she asked, batting leaves that scuttled by. The end of greenleaf was sending leaves churning around from the new winds of leaf-fall.
                Thrushpaw sighed. "Yeah, it's pretty cool," he admitted, lashing his golden tail.

Detecting his irritation, the silver she-cat bounded forward, catching up to Redleaf who was diligently leading the patrol. He turned to the eager apprentice, his eyes expressing a glint of humor. "Are we near the WindClan border yet?" he questioned her. Moonpaw lifted her head, her mouth opened and scenting. She smelled prey scuttling about, but now was not the time to hunt. Pine leaves, RiverClan scent... "WindClan!" she squealed. "I smell WindClan! Were very close," She fluffed out her silver fur, proud of her scenting skills.
                Maplenose gave a mrrww of amusement as Redleaf grinned. "Correct," he chuckled, flicking his whiskers at the strong WindClan scent. Soon, the ferns that marked their border came into view. Moonpaws paws itched with excitement, and she darted over to the border. A ginger tail struck out in front of her; it was Redleaf. He shook his head gingerly. "Watch how Whitebird does it," he whispered patiently.

Whitebird nodded, padding over to the leafy foliage to re-mark the beginning of their territory. Suddenly, she halted in mid-step. Lifting her nose, her eyes clouded with worry and confusion.

"What is it?" Redleaf asked, concern flooding his voice.
                Whitebird turned to them. "Rogues!" she growled. "Rogues have been on our border!"



-- Edited by Moonstar on Monday 31st of August 2009 03:24:45 AM

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