Warrior Cats: The Four Clans

Correcting this was fun. =]
It's really good- I'll say that right now.
Plus, just a bit of advice, commas aren't needed in a few of the places you put them. If you need help with correcting that, Google is always willing to help. Just search 'punctuation' and I think that'd do some good.
Also, after speech, you always hit enter and go to a new paragraph.
Other than that, I love it, even though it's moving a bit quickly.