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**Sunset** [Second Chapter Up!]


Welcome to Sunset!
By Moonstar

This is my new fan fiction. I apologize if I get tired of writing it eventually, but I have written this story farther than most of my stories start out, so I'm giving it a shot.
Tha chapter are long so I will post parts of the chapters and tell you when a new one begins.

It's about a girl named Ariella who has a fear of dogs, but one night she encounters something very bizarre that she cannot explain...

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-- Edited by Moonstar at 00:51, 2008-05-31

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First part of Chapter One up in a moment!

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Chapter One
Worries


He was scruffy and muddy. His occasional scratching caused me to infer the chance of fleas, not to mention his incessant wheezing, concluding a small cold. I had stopped dead in the trail as soon as his unfamiliar bark entered my ear with no alarm. As his charging, filthy fur, sagging, amber eyes, and harmless, thunderous paws burst into my view, I had become frighteningly aware of the numerous canines prowling my hometown.

You could say ________, Washington is a rainy, soggy land. You would be correct. But it is also calming, peaceful, and although often a little noisier than Id prefer, the charming music of squealing feathered birds, plummeting raindrops, and the squish of your boots colliding into muddy grass is what Ive come accustomed to. And admittedly, I now look forward to every new song added in my lifelong soundtrack.

But here I was, taking a brisk, cheerful walk on an unusually sunny Sunday afternoon in March when suddenly this massive beast lands eyes on me. Just recently I have begun to accept the fact that I am not exceptionally fond of dogs. I recall once when I was seven at my cousins house, their family puppy attacked me in their backyard. I still remember the thrashing fangs, scraping claws and chilling snarls. Its one of those experiences thats so incredibly unspeakable, you force anybody youve ever known to not even tap a finger on the subject.

Its not especially comforting that my older sister, Hannah, adores dogs and offers assistance at the local animal shelter. As youve probably already guessed, I also do not enjoy the stench of wet dog, yet Hannah always enters the house bathed in it. This is not extremely reassuring.

Now that youve heard my lame story, it must be understandable why I was barely breathing while this stray loomed in front of me, his beaming body casting a fearful shadow over the thin pebbled path. I can say with quite certainty that his teeth were dripping. From drool or blood, I dont know. But I wasnt about to take chances. An ear-shattering scream erupted from my dry throat as I whirled around and began to run. I ran and ran, trying to unsuccessfully ignore the thundering paw steps beating steadily behind me.

I didnt want to look behind me, but I ruefully dishonored my conscious as my head mechanically twisted around.

The mutt was rapidly gaining on me. His tongue was whipping out behind him as the air gushed by, twirling his fur in unbelievable motions.  I gasped at his undeniably long, deadly claws that struck the path with every gallop. He could easily rip apart my body with those. He was a rapacious beast, that I was certain. Somehow though, I couldnt help but wonder why he seemed so wolf-like. Simply a unique canine, I assumed.

I was slowing down. My chest heaved in uncontrollable gasps.  My short, choppy breath shot out of my mouth in foggy puffs. Suddenly, I foolishly began to come to a halt.

What are you doing? Hell kill you! My brain screamed, kicking the back of my head for my unbelievable stupidity.  I bit my lip; for I knew what it said was true. Still I couldnt help but edge to a complete, breathless stop. I collapsed on the grass next to the path.

Panting. I heard the recognizable noise of heaving pants. Hot breath exploded onto my neck as I felt a slimy, sandy object slide up to my chin. I squeezed my eyes shut and covered my face, yelping for support. Shivers glided up my spine as I heard pounding footsteps coming near. The last sight I remember confirming is blue sneakers next to me with frantic voices above, and then black clouds spotted my vision. I felt ready to vomit as my eyelids rolled to a close.



-- Edited by Moonstar at 06:31, 2008-05-27

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Wow, it's great I really want to read more! :DD

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Thanks so much! :DD

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Chapter One
Part Two


        

I woke up groggy and mystified. Pained, I forced my palm to my throat. I sighed with relief as I felt smooth, unharmed skin instead of the thick, bloody gash I was expecting. I was unsure of how long I'd passed out. Trying to breathe deeply, I sat up. Moaning, I dropped back down to the bed. Bed? I strained to open my eyes. I was in a pure white room, and I first supposed the hospital. But my eyes landed on a picture frame with an unidentifiable baby boy cradled by a loving father, so I assumed hospital was not an option.  Peering over the plain bed sheets, I noticed something familiar.

The stray was peeking over the foot of the bed with his sagging, amber eyes.

I pitched a high shriek and dashed to the head board of the bed. Eyes wide with terror, a couple of females darted into the room. I recognized Ashlin Helms from my previous soccer team as well as an unknown woman. I predicted it to be her mother. Sure enough, the lady struck out her hand in welcome.

"Have a good sleep?" She jostled my elbow. "I'm Evelyn, Ashlin's mother."

I tried to nod as sweat drained from my forehead. "Th-the dog..."  I choked, glaring at the mutt at the foot of the bed.

A light giggle escaped from Evelyn's lips, and I strained to hide embarrassment. "Oh, she wouldnt hurt a single flea in her fur."
Ashlin barged in. "What, you afraid of a dog?"

Let's just say Ashlin and I have never exactly been tight. In fact, I've always been rather uncomfortable and dull around her. My hazel pupils, wide and alert, ivory skin, and faint, washed out face were no match against her brown eyes cut into slits, peanut butter skin, and rosy, blushing cheeks. Sighing, I collected my confidence and made my calm comeback.

"As a matter of fact, yes I am." I answered uncertainly.

Confirming her poke of fun had done no harm, Ashlin snorted and, fortunately for me, exited the bedroom. Evelyn sighed.

"Please excuse Ashlin. We're still working on her social problems."
If only I could see the look on Ashlin's face if she found out her mother had just spilled that.

"Oh, I dont mind." It was a coverable fib. Quietly, I fidgeted under the sheets. The mutt now thankfully seemed uninterested, and he padded away, tail drooping. Serves him right.

"Are you hungry, Ariella?" Evelyn queried. "I could fix up a hot bowl of chicken noodle soup if you wish."

My mouth watered at the thought. "That'd be lovely. Thank you."

I am comfortably aware that I am partially named after a Disney mermaid. I have never felt ashamed, and never will be. Quite frankly, it sounds very pretty compared to my dull appearance. At least my parents werent blind enough to name me Minnie or Cinderella. It's not like they're Disney freaks or something.

Short, sweet, and to the point. That describes Ariella precisely.

Evelyn began to disappear out the doorway. "Oh, and Evelyn?" my voice squeaked. She obediently twisted around.

"Please close the door." I thought about the sneaky stray.

She nodded, understanding my feelings. "As you wish." And with a brief smile and the creak of the door, she was gone.



-- Edited by Moonstar at 00:49, 2008-05-31

-- Edited by Moonstar at 00:50, 2008-05-31

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This is very neat! =)

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Thanks so much for reading! :D

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