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TOPIC: [ CRITIQUE!! ] can i get some, myself? c:


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RE: [ CRITIQUE!! ] can i get some, myself? c:


Okay, so the story actually starts in my bio, which is the story of Jaggedpine, but it's REALLY long, but Jaggedpine was out over the lake on a log that stuck out a ways, and for no reason at all the RiverClan leader had come to ThunderClan and he shoved Jaggedpine off the log and into the river.
As most other ThunderClan cast, he can't swim, so he's on the verge of drowning when a RiverClan warrior who had followed her leader out of curiosity saved him.
Her name was Flightpatch.
Jaggedpine loved Flightpatch, but he loved Tesselsong too. His heart was torn.
He started hanging out with the daring RiverClan cat every other night when she would come over from RiverClan.
Anyway, the RiverClan leader found out about it and declared a war with ThunderClan, coz he's evil and hates ThunderClan, so he'd do anything to declare war on them.
Jaggedpine ended up having kits with Tesselsong. Nightkit, Gemkit, and Greenkit.

So, brief sinopsis of the first chapter...
Jaggedpine was on patrol and a terrible storm started up. It was REALLY big. They went back to camp and Jaggedpine went into the nursery to be with his kits in case they were scared. They weren't really scared, but curious.
They found their way out of the nursery, and (the unbelievable part) they were swept away by the wind. They landed in the water off the shore of RiverClan. Two cats saved them, they were taken back to the camp, blah blah blah, and that's all I can remember.

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I am Jaggedpine. Just thought I should let you know.

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